Thursday, March 06, 2008

An Attempt at Flash Fiction


She had just sat down with her cup of coffee when the phone rang.

“Hi, darling… No, I’m not home, I’m out in the mall… What’s that? There’s so much noise here. You can’t imagine the crowd! It’s like the whole city is celebrating the weekend in this place… Not alone, sweetie, I’m with my friend Pratibha…. Yeah, she called up and suggested going shopping. I was getting so bored at home, I thought it was a good idea. There’s a new bookstore here – a huge one. I had lots of fun browsing through books… Don’t worry, I only bought two books… We’re sitting in the cafĂ© now.

“How has your day been? Ah, you’re going for that movie! Have fun, sweetie.

“No, don’t worry, I’ll be careful to go home before dark… Yes, I’ll leave soon… No, she doesn’t drive either, I’ll take a rickshaw. I’ll SMS you when I get home, don’t worry!

“Yes, bye, have a great time!”

She placed the phone on the table and took a sip of the delicious coffee. Then she noticed that Shantanu had a quizzical look on his face.

“Don’t look like that,” she said.

“I’m surprised,” said Shantanu. “I took you to be an honest person.”

“I am,” she sighed, “as far as I can afford to be. But I can’t just lock myself in my house all the time and not talk to people. My boyfriend is the kind of guy who has a fit if I tell him I’m working on a project with only male colleagues. If I tell him I’ve been to buy vegetables, he’d probably ask whether I went to a sabjiwallah or a sabjiwalleeh.”

Shantanu shook with laughter, indignation forgotten, while his friend calmly finished her plum cake.

5 comments:

Usha said...

interesting!
But what I cannot understand is when young women tell me that they find it cute when their boyfriends are so jealous. Isn't this a clear sign that you should run as far away from this guy as possible?

Unmana said...

I agree - it should be. Acute jealousy/possessiveness is likely to be a sign of emotional abuse later, I think. In no way is it a sign of "love", because love is always accompanied by respect.

GettingThereNow said...

Agree, agree!!

Unmana said...

To the post, or the comments? :-)

GettingThereNow said...

To the comments. I would run, not walk, from such a guy.